Okay. Don't take this to be criticism, because it's not. Really, what you have is a pretty good foundation. It's just that...
I keep getting the feeling that if you just rework the ideas a bit so you erase all references to Code Geass, what you might get is a story that could stand on its own (i.e., an original creation). I'm not saying that this will turn out to be a bad fanfic; I just feel that if you pour some more work into what you already have, you might get a pretty good original story. Of course, this might require some heavy thinking, especially if all you're planning to do is retell the Code Geass story in 19th-century America, so your mileage might vary. >_<
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Okay. Don't take this to be criticism, because it's not. Really, what you have is a pretty good foundation. It's just that...
I keep getting the feeling that if you just rework the ideas a bit so you erase all references to Code Geass, what you might get is a story that could stand on its own (i.e., an original creation). I'm not saying that this will turn out to be a bad fanfic; I just feel that if you pour some more work into what you already have, you might get a pretty good original story. Of course, this might require some heavy thinking, especially if all you're planning to do is retell the Code Geass story in 19th-century America, so your mileage might vary. >_<